I read your posting and can very well understand the situation and how this feels. Clearly it´s difficult to give reliable feedback on the situation, not having experienced it with you together. But let me try…
One weak point of stories and of presentations in general, that I have seen very often over the years, is the finish. So great content and details are shown, also understood by the audience, but at the end of the meeting a clear “Call to Action” is missing. It is key in my opinion that you don´t let your management leave the meeting without having clarity about the next steps: who does what exactly and until when, and who is responsible for making sure action points are worked on and feedback is given?
If I would have to cluster a presentation into 3 “bullet groups” these are:
What is the problem?
What is the impact (of the problem)?
What is the solution (to this problem)?
But bullet point #4 – and this is the last one, it´s a must, and just as important as the other three: With the above said – what do I expect from my audience to do now? What do I need from them? Which commitment? Make sure to be very outspoken at the end, and guarantee your management has a crystal clear understanding on what you expect them to do.
I suggest you check your next presentation for this Call2Action, and if it´s missing – make it a strong one!
So have fun telling your next story 😊
F-Top Coach / Regine